Here's what I'm going to do. I'm going to read through what I have. There are parts I know are missing and I'll weave those in as go along. When I get close to the end, where I believe I went astray, I'll copy everything up to that point into a new document. Then I'll start typing again, making sure I choose the right words to bend the play in the right direction.
Here's what I have for the last pages (32-34) right now:
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BARBA
Tina! Wait!
(Exits behind Tina.)
FEUR
She's right, you know. We've at least
got savings and retirement money to fall back on.
JAMES
Sterk will come through.
FEUR
He still going to propose? What's he
got to offer?
JAMES
He's a good cook and he has a little
saved. But I don't think that's what we need to be focused on. Not
yet. Something just occurred to me.
FEUR
Oh, yeah? What?
JAMES
You've been carrying on about that jam
for the last fifteen minutes.
FEUR
Yeah. You noticed, eh?
JAMES
You can taste it, can't you.
FEUR
I can. It's amazing.
JAMES
And your promise to Barba?
FEUR
Sh! Not yet. I'm not completely sure
about this. I want to taste a few more things before I tell her.
JAMES
Got your foot in it now, Feur.
FEUR
The doctors said it would never happen.
Since I never expected to taste again, what did it matter, agreeing
to marry when I finally did.
JAMES
Maybe you should have taken Ameerah's
prognostication more seriously.
FEUR
I take nothing about that woman
seriously.
BARBA
(O.S.)
Well you tell me if I can help in any
way.
FEUR
And, shush, you scoundrel. Don't breath a word of this.
And, shush, you scoundrel. Don't breath a word of this.
(Barba enters.)
JAMES
Lips sealed.
BARBA
What's that?
FEUR
Nothing.
JAMES
I said I have an idea on the tip of my
lips.
BARBA
Tip of your tongue.
JAMES
Yes. There, too.
FEUR
What idea?
JAMES
Between us, Ameerah, and Sterk, we
probably have enough to save Tina's house.
BARBA
I don't think we have that much. She
took out a third mortgage on the place.
FEUR
What!?
BARBA
She was just telling me.
JAMES
We could at least get her caught up and
cover a few more months.
FEUR
That's wipe us all out. What then? Live
on the street?
BARBA
No, it would give us time to find a
long term solution. James is right. We need to talk to Ameerah and
Sterk, see if they want to buy in.
JAMES
I'll need to check my accounts.
BARBA
We all do.
FEUR
We could walk down to the bank.
BARBA
We can check on the computer.
FEUR
There's no ice cream shop on the
computer.
BARBA
You want ice cream?
FEUR
I want something cold. You want to come
along, James?
JAMES
No, I can call my broker and get the
numbers. So I'll just stay here.
BARBA
You're serious?
FEUR
It's a nice day. Why not? I'll get our
coats?
BARBA
(Laughing.)
It's all very strange, but okay. To the
bank and the ice cream shop.
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Expect some or a lot of that to change.
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